Severed Arow's Toon's

[severed arow]

Hi :P So yeh although i dont really do any of the kind of graphics i used to do anymore i have started doing cartoons (manga style). So yeh here are a few C&C please;

(for some others see my deviant art http://kamisoyokaze.deviantart.com/ )

[I C0NN0R I]

first ones cool except the nipples are retarded/annoying/ruin it. Also needa work on anatomy a bit, third one is missing a neck, and all their faces look distorted/skewed. Also the shading is really flat.

definitely fix the first one and just try flat colours.

[Spittles (Old School)]

Yeah the neck could be better on the third one, other than that they're pretty good.

[severed arow]

ok :P the 3rd one is the first one i did :P So i know i fucked the neck on that one :P I wont try flat colours :L I'll just improve at shading, im going to try out cell shading or something, but i've never seen a toon i like wit flat colours... + yeh faces are wierd :P its annoying me, except the last one, i have a habit of making their jaws too wide :P Idk why i keep doing that >.<. As for anatomy yeh it need a little bit of work, but according to the people who do manga properly, i've pretty much got that down now, they just say i need to work on making them more... 3D like they say they look a bit flat, and they dont mean the colouring, so I'm trying to work on that too

[I C0NN0R I]

ok :P the 3rd one is the first one i did :P So i know i fucked the neck on that one :P I wont try flat colours :L I'll just improve at shading, im going to try out cell shading or something, but i've never seen a toon i like wit flat colours... + yeh faces are wierd :P its annoying me, except the last one, i have a habit of making their jaws too wide :P Idk why i keep doing that >.<. As for anatomy yeh it need a little bit of work, but according to the people who do manga properly, i've pretty much got that down now, they just say i need to work on making them more... 3D like they say they look a bit flat, and they dont mean the colouring, so I'm trying to work on that too

show work of people who are giving you advice  :shifty:

[TJ]

first ones cool except the nipples are retarded/annoying/ruin it. Also needa work on anatomy a bit, third one is missing a neck, and all their faces look distorted/skewed. Also the shading is really flat.

definitely fix the first one and just try flat colours.

NIPPLE HATER!  :o

[Dutch Ork]

I like them

Ps, Hey sev, its my from the old years. You dont play rs anymore?

[severed arow]

I like them

Ps, Hey sev, its my from the old years. You dont play rs anymore?

nah mate im long out of that scene

@Con

etc :P

[TJ]

[Adam]

Not bad... How much do you want if I wanted a cartoon sig :)

[Gareth l Rare]

Not bad... How much do you want if I wanted a cartoon sig :)

Dont grave dig  :mellow:

[JMartino]

Awesome mate, Nipples in the first one could be positioned better and or reduced. But keep it up :)