A big project

[Sefket]

I started this months ago and I really wanted to start on this again.

Tell me if this is good so far:

Please give me feedback.

[Kyle]

ur the worst mom in the world!!!!!!!!!!!!111111

[Andrew]

wuts this movie about? :o

[Shivan]

Are you actually going to make a movie or a show ?

if you are

Good luck man !

Look pretty great to me.

[Nxjr]

put a rape seen in there

[Sefket]

put a rape seen in there

Wtf is wrong with you?

[Sefket]

Are you actually going to make a movie or a show ?

if you are

Good luck man !

Look pretty great to me.

Movie.

Thank you!

[Animal]

can u add a sex dungeon scene?

50 shades of shit pls

[Animal]

can u add a sex dungeon scene?

50 shades of shit pls

[Dizzy]

Not bad. I like the way you describe the indivdual characters. Try to throw a #finalownage somewhere in the background of the girls room on like a poster so we can recruit

[Guest Tederick]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=A4VbOHvaPRc

[Lucifer]

It's alright but fix some of the sentence structure and grammatical errors.

[Veta]

"please mom 30 more minutes!" sefkets childhood

Wasn't bad cutie pie i wish you the best of luck in your writing career. i cant give you any real feedback tho ;p

[Finitude]

put a rape seen in there

Wtf is wrong with you?

He's right. It gives the viewers a feeling that you're trying to portray something really deep. Just like in The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo.

[DeltaPapa]

I have a morning ritual that I need to share. I call it "the terminator". First I crouch down in the shower in the classic "naked terminator traveling through time" pose.

With my eyes closed I crouch there for a minute, visualizing either Arnold or the guy from the second movie (not the chick in the third one because that one sucked) and I start to hum the terminator theme. Then I slowly rise to a standing position and open my eyes. It helps me to proceed through my day as an emotionless, cyborg badass. The only problem is if the shower curtain sticks to my terminator leg. It ruins the fantasy.

I found tonight that it is more successful to progressively humm it louder as you perform the ritual.

[Marc|Criti]

I already commented on your script writing last time, and you've improved, but it still seems like you don't have many ideas, and that you're nothing writing the right way. You're still writing a story, not a script. For half of the scenes I have no idea how you're going to film it to show all you've written.

I'm not sure how you're supposed to do a "10 minutes later" in a movie without making it look shit. Just show her directly coming home instead.

How can you see the daughter angrily putting on her pajamas? did she magically get undressed or was she before? You don't show that in movies.

also, you can't make it look like she's tired from working if you don't show a fast forward of her job day or something.

the rest is still pretty dull, but then i don't know where you're going. I hope it's not the cliché "you're the worst mom in the world!" and the next morning the kid is gone "WHY DID I DO THAT TO HER ITS MY FAULT WAAAAA i'm going to kill them all"

if you want to get people hooked on your movie, get some action, at least something strange or original from the begining.

I have a morning ritual that I need to share. I call it "the terminator". First I crouch down in the shower in the classic "naked terminator traveling through time" pose.

With my eyes closed I crouch there for a minute, visualizing either Arnold or the guy from the second movie (not the chick in the third one because that one sucked) and I start to hum the terminator theme. Then I slowly rise to a standing position and open my eyes. It helps me to proceed through my day as an emotionless, cyborg badass. The only problem is if the shower curtain sticks to my terminator leg. It ruins the fantasy.

I found tonight that it is more successful to progressively humm it louder as you perform the ritual.

lol'd progressively hard

[Tony]

i'd watch a movie you wrote, what else to do while my bot runs

Edited November 9, 2012 by Tony

[`Final]

put a rape seen in there

scene....god...

[`Final]

I already commented on your script writing last time, and you've improved, but it still seems like you don't have many ideas, and that you're nothing writing the right way. You're still writing a story, not a script. For half of the scenes I have no idea how you're going to film it to show all you've written.

I'm not sure how you're supposed to do a "10 minutes later" in a movie without making it look shit. Just show her directly coming home instead.

How can you see the daughter angrily putting on her pajamas? did she magically get undressed or was she before? You don't show that in movies.

also, you can't make it look like she's tired from working if you don't show a fast forward of her job day or something.

the rest is still pretty dull, but then i don't know where you're going. I hope it's not the cliché "you're the worst mom in the world!" and the next morning the kid is gone "WHY DID I DO THAT TO HER ITS MY FAULT WAAAAA i'm going to kill them all"

if you want to get people hooked on your movie, get some action, at least something strange or original from the begining.

I have a morning ritual that I need to share. I call it "the terminator". First I crouch down in the shower in the classic "naked terminator traveling through time" pose.

With my eyes closed I crouch there for a minute, visualizing either Arnold or the guy from the second movie (not the chick in the third one because that one sucked) and I start to hum the terminator theme. Then I slowly rise to a standing position and open my eyes. It helps me to proceed through my day as an emotionless, cyborg badass. The only problem is if the shower curtain sticks to my terminator leg. It ruins the fantasy.

I found tonight that it is more successful to progressively humm it louder as you perform the ritual.

lol'd progressively hard

I already commented on your script writing last time, and you've improved, but it still seems like you don't have many ideas, and that you're nothing writing the right way. You're still writing a story, not a script. For half of the scenes I have no idea how you're going to film it to show all you've written.

I'm not sure how you're supposed to do a "10 minutes later" in a movie without making it look shit. Just show her directly coming home instead.

How can you see the daughter angrily putting on her pajamas? did she magically get undressed or was she before? You don't show that in movies.

also, you can't make it look like she's tired from working if you don't show a fast forward of her job day or something.

the rest is still pretty dull, but then i don't know where you're going. I hope it's not the cliché "you're the worst mom in the world!" and the next morning the kid is gone "WHY DID I DO THAT TO HER ITS MY FAULT WAAAAA i'm going to kill them all"

if you want to get people hooked on your movie, get some action, at least something strange or original from the begining.

I have a morning ritual that I need to share. I call it "the terminator". First I crouch down in the shower in the classic "naked terminator traveling through time" pose.

With my eyes closed I crouch there for a minute, visualizing either Arnold or the guy from the second movie (not the chick in the third one because that one sucked) and I start to hum the terminator theme. Then I slowly rise to a standing position and open my eyes. It helps me to proceed through my day as an emotionless, cyborg badass. The only problem is if the shower curtain sticks to my terminator leg. It ruins the fantasy.

I found tonight that it is more successful to progressively humm it louder as you perform the ritual.

lol'd progressively hard

i wanna lick you from head to toe..

[Dog]

Terrible, just terrible.

[Fears BFF]

Put a incest scene it will throw everyone off

[Devlz]

It felt like reading the script of The Bold and the Beautiful...

[Dizzy]

Go on teamspeak, ill help u out

[Jon]

Go on teamspeak, ill help u out

Arn't you like 12?

[Guest Tederick]

Go on teamspeak, ill help u out

Arn't you like 12?

GOTTEM